Please review my writing task 1 of IELTS, in the Cambridge 10, Test 3

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Please review my writing task 1 of IELTS, in the Cambridge 10, Test 3.

The following bar charts illustrates what UK higher level students do if they do not take full-time jobs after graduating in the year 2008.

It can be seen from the two charts that graduates and postgraduates pursued further study the most while they saw voluntary work as the least interested choice. The numbers of graduate students in each group was approximately 10 times higher than their postgraduate counterpart.

There were only 3,500 graduate students and 345 postgraduate ones who did voluntary job, reporting the least number. Up to 29,665 graduates went for further study and 2,725 postgraduates chosen the same career path.

The figures of part-time work and unemployment for graduate students were not far different, which were 17,735 and 16,235 respectively. But for the postgraduates, the number of those who did part-time work was much higher than the number of those who unemployed. They were 2535 and 1625 respectively.