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The diagram illustrates the progress of brick production for the building industry. There are 7 big steps in the process of brick manufacturing.

First, the digger will be selecting clay on the ground. Then the mix of clay and ground that has just been selected will be clarified through a metal grid so as to only keep the high-quality clay. The clay will be put on a roller in the second step. It is going to be mixed with water and sand after that. Next, a wire cutter will perfectly cut the mixture into bricks, or moulds will be used to make out the shape of bricks. In the fourth step, the bricks will be put in a drying oven for about 24-48 hours. After that, there are 3 little paces in the fifth step. To begin with, the bricks will be organized in a kiln with moderate temperature (200°C - 980°C). Moreover, the temperature will be increased to higher, from 870°C - 1300°C. And lastly, the bricks will be moved to a cooling chamber and kept there for 48-72 hours. Finally, the bricks will be packaged together and delivered in a container to the customers.

im just a beginner and i dont know many ways to present the information rather than will be, if you can please suggest me some! thank you so much for checking my work!

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Ph Duongim just a beginner and i dont know many ways to present the information rather than will be, if you can please suggest me some! thank you so much for checking my work!

The present tense is better for process diagrams.

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IELTS TASK 1 (DIAGRAM)

The diagram illustrates the progress of brick production for the building industry. There are 7 big steps in the process of brick manufacturing.

First, the digger will be selecting clay on the ground. Then the mix of clay and ground that has just been selected will be clarified through a metal grid so as to only keep the high-quality clay. The clay will be put on a roller in the second step. It is going to be mixed with water and sand after that. Next, a wire cutter will perfectly cut the mixture into bricks, or moulds will be used to make out the shape of bricks. In the fourth step, the bricks will be put in a drying oven for about 24-48 hours. After that, there are 3 little paces in the fifth step. To begin with, the bricks will be organized in a kiln with moderate temperature (200°C - 980°C). Moreover, the temperature will be increased to higher, from 870°C - 1300°C. And lastly, the bricks will be moved to a cooling chamber and kept there for 48-72 hours. Finally, the bricks will be packaged together and delivered in a container to the customers.

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Task 1 :

The diagram illustrates the progress of brick production for the building industry. There are 7 big steps in the process of brick manufacturing.

First, the digger will be selecting clay on the ground. Then the mix of clay and ground that has just been selected will be clarified through a metal grid so as to only keep the high-quality clay. The clay will be put on a roller in the second step. It is going to be mixed with water and sand after that. Next, a wire cutter will perfectly cut the mixture into bricks, or moulds will be used to make out the shape of bricks. In the fourth step, the bricks will be put in a drying oven for about 24-48 hours. After that, there are 3 little paces in the fifth step. To begin with, the bricks will be organized in a kiln with moderate temperature (200°C - 980°C). Moreover, the temperature will be increased to higher, from 870°C - 1300°C. And lastly, the bricks will be moved to a cooling chamber and kept there for 48-72 hours. Finally, the bricks will be packaged together and delivered in a container to the customers.

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Use present tense to describe a process flow chart.

The diagram illustrates the progress (wrong word) of brick production for the building industry. There are seven major 7 big (Big and huge are baby's words. They are not appropriate for this level of writing.) steps in the process of brick manufacturing.

(You need to first give an outline of the main features)

First, the digger ~~will be~~ excavates ~~selecting~~ clay from on the ground. In the second step, the diggings, a mix of clay and small stones ~~ground that has just been selected~~ will be ~~clarified~~ sorted by putting it through a metal grid so as to only keep the high-quality clay. The clay ~~will be put~~ falls through the grid to a roller ~~in the second step~~. ~~It is going to be~~ and then mixed with water and sand to make a semi-solid soft mixture. ~~after that.~~ (You are not writing the step numbers...) Next, a wire cutter will perfectly cut the mixture into bricks, or moulds will be used to form the clay into ~~make out~~ the shape of bricks. In the fourth step, the bricks will be put in a drying oven for about 24-48 hours. After that comes the firing stage, which has three parts, ~~there~~ a~~re 3 little paces~~ in the fifth step. To begin with, the bricks ~~will be organized~~ are placed in a kiln with moderate temperature (200°C - 980°C). ~~Moreover,~~ Next the temperature is ~~will be~~ increased to high, which is ~~higher, from~~ 870°C - 1300°C. And lastly, the bricks ~~will be~~ are moved to a cooling chamber and kept there for 48-72 hours. Finally, the bricks will be packaged together on pallets and delivered ~~in a container~~ by truck to the customers.

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