Please review my writing task 1

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Please review my writing task 1Here is the topic:The charts below show information about three different deserts around the world.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.write at least 150 words.Here is my writing:The charts provide some statistical data of three different deserts on three distinct continentsOverall, there are four indexes of each desert presented in the charts. They are the total area of the desert, median annual rainfall, average temperatures, and temperature extremes. The area is given in square km, while rainfall and temperatures are cm and degrees Celsius respectively. The average temperatures are recorded for two seasons. Maximum and minimum values of temperature are also provided.In terms of size, the Sahara in Africa is the largest, it covers 9000000 square km which is approximately 30 times that of the Great Basin. The Great Basin and The Taklamakan deserts have approximately the same size of 305,775 and 270,000 square km.The rainfall differs from desert to desert. In the Sahara, the average amount of 7.6 cm in the north is compared to 12.7cm in the south. In the Great Basin, this value fluctuates between 5.1 to 51 cm while The sparest rainfall of 3.8 cm (west) and 1.0 cm (east) belongs to the Taklamakan. Regarding the temperature, the Sahara has a peak temperature of 580C, followed by the Great Basin (570C), and the lowest temperature, which drops below 0, belongs to the Taklimakan (-26.10C). The average temperature in the summer of the Sahara and the Great Basin is the same (300C), and 50C greater than the Taklamakan’s mean value (250C). The Sahara has a warmer average temperature (130C) than Taklmakan (-90C) and Great Basin (-80C) in the winter.

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The charts (This is a set of three tables.) provide some statistical data of three different deserts on three ~~distinct~~ continents (Missing punctuation. Also, this is not very specific.)

(This is part of the first paragraph. You are not writing about the data values, but about the structure of the tables. This is extremely wordy. ) Overall, there are four indexes of each desert presented in the charts. They are the total area of the desert, median annual rainfall, average temperatures, and temperature extremes. The area is given in square km, while rainfall and temperatures are cm and degrees Celsius respectively. The average temperatures are recorded for two seasons. Maximum and minimum values of temperature are also provided.

Sample opening paragraph. You wrote 76 words in the first two paragraphs, and did not mention the names of the deserts or their continents. This sample opening paragraph gives more information in fewer (64) words.

Paragraph 1 describes these tables and what they contain, but not any data values.

The set of three tables provide data about three deserts, the Sahara in Africa, the Taklimakan in Asia and the Great Basin of North America. Each table has four rows with first, the size in km² ; second, the average annual rainfall (in cm.); third, the average temperatures in summer and winter (in °C); and fourth, notable temperature extremes, either the highest or lowest.

Your second paragraph needs to point out some main features. The instructions are: selecting and reporting the main information. Do not just start writing about the detail. You will lose points for "task response".

In terms of size, the Sahara in Africa is the largest, it covers 9000000 square km which is approximately 30 times that of the Great Basin. The Great Basin and The Taklamakan deserts have approximately the same size of 305,775 and 270,000 square km.

The rainfall differs from desert to desert. In the Sahara, the average amount of 7.6 cm in the north is compared to 12.7cm in the south. In the Great Basin, this value has a very large range, fluctuates (wrong word - you can only see fluctuation on a line graph.) between 5.1 to 51 cm while The ~~sparest~~ lowest rainfall of 3.8 cm (west) and 1.0 cm (east) belongs to the Taklamakan.

Regarding the temperature, the Sahara has a peak temperature of 58⁰C, followed by the Great Basin (57⁰C), and the lowest temperature, which drops below 0, belongs to the Taklimakan (-26.1⁰C). The average temperature in the summer of the Sahara and the Great Basin is the same (30⁰C), and 5⁰C greater than the Taklamakan’s mean value (25⁰C). The Sahara has a warmer average temperature (13⁰C) than Taklmakan (-9⁰C) and Great Basin (-8⁰C) in the winter.

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