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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.The pie charts compare the proportion of water consumption for industrial, agricultural and domestic in six different places in the world.Overall, more water is consumed by industrial in North America and Europe. By contrast, agriculture is by far the most popular of water usage in four other areas in the world.In North America and Europe, industrial use accounts for about a half of water consumption in both places, about 48% and 53% respectively. The firgure for domestic water consumption is the lowest percentage, just more than one in ten in two areas.While about 39% water used for agriculture in North America, the firgure for Europe is 7% lower, at 32%.Regarding the other regions, most water is used for agriculture, with the highest percentage belonging to Central Asia at 88%. The opposite trend can be seen from industrial and domestic water consumption, just under 30% of the total of 2 categories. While water used for residents is the lowest percentage in South East Asia, at 7%, the trend can be seen from industry in the rest of three places.

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The pie charts compare the proportion of water used ~~consumption~~ for industrial, agricultural and domestic (Those words are adjectives. You must have a noun after them) purposes in six different places (wrong word. A place can be a city or address. These are regions or areas. Most are continents.) in the world. (Incomplete. What are these six regions?)

Overall, more water is consumed by industrial in North America and Europe. By contrast, agriculture is by far the most popular of water usage (Wrong phrase. "popular" means that people like it. This has nothing to do with popularity.) in four other areas (What are they?) in the world.

In North America and Europe, industrial use accounts for about a half of water consumption in both places, about 48% and 53% respectively. The firgure (wrong word. ) for domestic water consumption is the lowest percentage, just more than one in ten in two areas.While about 39% water was used (incorrect verb form) for agriculture in North America, the firgure (wrong word) for Europe is 7% lower, at 32%.

Regarding the other regions, most water is used for agriculture, with the highest percentage seen in ~~belonging to~~ Central Asia at 88%. The opposite trend (wrong word. - A trend is a change over time. There are no time points in this figurel) can be seen from industrial and domestic water consumption, just under 30% of the total of 2 categories. While water used for residents is the lowest percentage in South East Asia, at 7%, the trend (wrong word. ) can be seen from industry in the rest of three places.(wrong word. )

Example essay. Note. This is 230 words, much longer than an actual Task 1 essay should be. However, it will give you some text to study for this task.

Paragraph #1: Describe the figure but not the information content:

The pie charts compare the relative amounts of water used in three different economic sectors (Industry, Agriculture and Domestic use) among six regions of the world, four continents (Europe, Africa, North and South America) and two large areas of Asia (Central and South East).

Paragraph #2: Pick our two or three of the most significant features.

Overall, the four regions with developing countries, Africa, Asia and South America, use a much higher proportion of water for agriculture than the two continents with industrialized countries, North America and Europe. North America and Europe have nearly identical patterns of water usage.

Paragraph #3 Pick out some interesting details and do some comparisons.

The highest percentage of agricultural water consumption is in Central Asia, with nearly 90% of total usage. But it is closely followed by Africa, at 88% and South East Asia at just over 80%. The remaining water usage in Africa and Central Asia is nearly equally divided between residential and industrial sectors. South East Asia uses about twice as much water for industry as for households, 12 and 7 percent, respectively. In contrast, Europe and North America allocate about half their water to industry, 52 and 48% respectively. The next category is for agriculture, with about a third in Europe and forty percent in North America. South America is similar to other developing regions with the highest usage, 71% going to agriculture. But it is the region with the largest domestic consumption, at 19%. In comparison, Europe and North America have domestic usage of 15 and 13 percent, respectively.

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