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Task 1: The table below shows the percentage of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011.Age groupFemaleMale0 - 951,350,310 - 1742,224,618 - 3917,19,740 - 5912,38.060+18,513,2The table gives information about the proportion of the population of one town who cycled in 2011, according to five age groupsIt is noticeable, the percentage of children under ten years old used bicycles was highest in both genders. However, for all age groups, the proportion of female cyclists was higher than male cyclists.In terms of the female group, the proportion of girls in 0-9 ages was highest, at 51,3% which followed by teenagers (10-17 years old) at 42.2%. However, with the older groups, the figure for that was decreased at 18-39 ages and 40-59 ages which were 17,1% and 12,3%, respectively. In the oldest group, women over 60 who took part in riding bicycles was increased to 18,5%.For the males, the percentage of boys under ten years old who cycled was two times the figure for teenagers (10-17 ages), at 50,3% and 24,6% respectively. Similar to female groups, the rate of men cyclist aged 18-39 and 40-59 were significantly lower than others, at 9.7% and 13.2%, lower than the oldest group which was accounted for 13.2%

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The table gives information about ("information about" is very vague. It does not inform the reader of exactly what is listed in the table. Be precise!) the proportion of the population of one town who cycled in 2011, according to five age groups (missing punctuation) (Your first paragraph is inadequate. What are the age groups? You also do not mention that the listing is according to gender. That is a big omission.)

Model paragraph:

The table lists the percentages of people who rode bicycles in 2011 in one particular town. It is broken down by gender and age group. There are five age groups, two for children and three for adults, specifically, young children aged 0-9, older children and teenagers aged 10-17, young adults aged 19-39, middle-aged adults aged 49-59, and older adults, over 60.

Note: You can refer to the age groups by name in the body paragraphs and not have to write the awkward phrases with the age ranges in each group.

e.g. As a percentage, more young children rode bicycles than people in any other age group, regardless of gender. Percentages were the lowest for the middle-aged adults. In all age groups, women and girls participated in this activity at a higher level than their male counterparts.

~~It is noticeable,~~ the percentage of children under ten years old used bicycles (ungrammatical) was highest (compared to what?) in both genders. However, for all age groups, the proportion of female cyclists was higher than male cyclists.

In terms of the female group, the proportion of girls in 0-9 ages was highest, at 51,3% which followed by (ungrammatical) teenagers (10-17 years old) at 42.2%. However, with the older groups, the figure (wrong word) for that was decreased at 18-39 ages and 40-59 ages (ungrammatical) which were 17,1% and 12,3%, respectively. In the oldest group, women over 60 who took part in riding bicycles was increased (wrong verb form) to 18,5%.

For the males, the percentage of boys under ten years old who cycled was two times the figure for teenagers (10-17 ages), at 50,3% and 24,6% respectively. Similar to female groups, the rate (wrong word) of men cyclist (wrong form) aged 18-39 and 40-59 were significantly lower than others, at 9.7% and 13.2%, lower than the oldest group which was accounted for (ungrammatical) 13.2% (missing punctuation)

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Age group	Female	Male
0 - 9	51,3	50,3
10 - 17	42,2	24,6
18 - 39	17,1	9,7
40 - 59	12,3	8.0
60+	18,5	13,2