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HiPlease review this IELTS Task 1 WritingThe diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing frozen fish pie.  One series of processes produce potato French chips, the final ingredient. and the other gets the fish ready for the pie. While the former is a simple process, the latter is a labor intensive and elaborate one.Potatoes reach the production line almost a month early, but whereas fish is brought there not later than twelve hours.  Potatoes are thoroughly cleaned, peeled and sliced for finger chips. They are boiled, chilled and moved to the store. Unlike the potatoes, which are cleaned with water, fish is cleaned using lemon juice and salt before being steamed in the oven. It goes for visual inspection after the skin and bones are removed.  Thereafter, peas,  sauce, and potato finger chips are added to it.  The pie is wrapped and stored in the freezer from where it will be dispatched to the wholesale and retail outlets.Suresh

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The diagram is faulty. Chips are not used in fish pie, but mashed potatoes are the top crust. The step to mash the boiled potatoes, mixing in some milk and butter, is missing.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

It is not your fault that the description is not correct. The diagram is quite misleading and flawed.

The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing frozen fish pies.

One series of processes produce potato French chips, the final ingredient. and the other gets the fish ready for the pie. (That is not a good description.) While the former is a simple process, the latter is a labor intensive and elaborate one.

Potatoes reach their production line almost a month early, but whereas the fish is brought there not later than twelve hours prior to cooking. Potatoes are thoroughly cleaned, peeled and sliced ~~for finger chips~~. They are boiled, chilled and moved to storage. ~~the store~~. Unlike the potatoes, which are cleaned with water, fish is cleaned using lemon juice and salt (That is not correct. When we clean fish, we cut off the head and tail, gut it - that is, remove the entrails, remove the scales, then the bones. This diagram does not include the numerous steps to prepare the fillets. The sprinkling of lemon juice and salt is for flavoring.) before being steamed in the oven. It goes for visual inspection after the skin and bones are removed. Thereafter, peas, sauce, and potato finger chips are added to it. The pie is wrapped and stored in the freezer from where it will be dispatched to the wholesale and retail outlets.

Sample Essay: (~190 words)

The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing frozen fish pies.

There are two production lines: one for the pie crust, made of potatoes, and the other for the filling, made of fish, sauce and peas. While the former is a simple process, the latter is a labor intensive and elaborate one. There are several steps not shown: the preparation of the salmon fillets, the peas and the sauce.

Potatoes can be stored for up to a month before being delivered to their production line, but the salmon must be fresh, delivered no later than twelve hours prior to cooking. In the first process, potatoes are thoroughly washed, peeled and sliced and then boiled, chilled and moved to storage. The salmon fillets come into the main production line, and are seasoned with lemon juice and salt before being cooked in a steamer. Next, the skin and bones are removed, which is a manual process. Then they undergo a visual inspection before being mixed with pre-prepared peas and sauce in individual serving bowls. The cooked potatoes are then added on top. The containers are packaged and frozen, ready for shipment to grocery stores.

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The rendered chart illustrates the percentage of electric appliances holded by the households and the time spent to do the housework. And, how it varies in time being from the year 1920 to 2019

Firstly , we can observe there are different electrical appliances like washing machine, refrigerator and vaccum cleaner.In the year 1920 the usage of washing machine start from the zero level and reach up to 100% in 2019 and , there is no downfall in the graph the number of users constantly increased. And, the usage of vacuum cleaner also gradually increased like refrigerator, in 1920 its 30% and hit 100 in 2019. when it comes to washing machine there is a slight fluctuation in graph although, the number of users increased . In 1920 its 40% and reached upto 70% with slope down in 1980.

Secondly, As the usage of electrical appliances increased the number of hours have a drastic change. In 1920 no of hours spent per week is 50% . And , in 2019 it falls to 10% without fluctuation in the graph.

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Hello , Please review my ielts task 1

The chart below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in housholds in one country between 1920 and 2019

The renered chart illustrate the percentage of electric appliances holded by the households and the time spent to do the house work . And, how it varies in time being from the year 1920 to 2019

Firstly , we can observe there are different electrical appliances like washing machine, refrigerator and vaccum cleaner.In the year 1920 the usage of washing machine start from the zero level and reach upto 100% in 2019 and , there is no downfall in the graph the number of users constantly increased. And , the usage of vacuum cleaner also gradually increased like refrigerator , in 1920 its 30% and hit 100 in 2019. when it comes to washingmachine there is a slight fluctuation in graph although, the number of users increased . In 1920 its 40% and reached upto 70% with slope down in 1980.

Secondly , As the usage of the electrical appliances increased the number of hours have a drastic change . In 1920 no of hours spent per week is 50% . And , in 2019 it falls to 10% without fluctuation in the graph

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