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The provided line graph compares the liberation of carbon dioxide by people of four different countries in forty years.

Overall, two countries, Italy and Portugal demonstrates gradual incline of all the decade in aspect to emission of carbon dioxide. However, Swedish liberate carbon dioxide is rose up to the pick till 1977 and dramatically fall down. In contrast , british illustrates down ratio in all decades rather had top ratio all time then other countries.

To commence with, people of United Kingdom emited carbon dioxide in higher rate from1967 to 2007 instead it downwards constantly all decades, had top rate of emmision all time. Moreover, emission carbon dioxide by swedish illustrates high pace rose up till 1977 then surprisingly declined with crossing over by Italian at 1987. Additionally, the Italian and Portuguese liberated carbon dioxide in parallel manner and provide incline consequences of all decades.

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The ~~provided~~ (Do not use "given" "provided" or other such past participles. It is very unnatural) line graph compares the liberation (wrong word) of carbon dioxide by people of four different countries (which countries?) in forty years. (Wrong expression. Also is this 1920-1960?)

Overall, two countries, Italy and Portugal demonstrates (wrong word, incorrect verb form )gradual incline (wrong word) of all the decade (wrong form. Which decades are you describing?)) in aspect to (wrong phrase - bad English) emission of carbon dioxide. However, Swedish (wrong word. Swedish is an adjective.) liberate (wrong word) carbon dioxide is rose up (ungrammatical) to the pick (wrong word) till 1977 and dramatically fall down. (wrong phrase. Little children fall down when they learn to walk.) In contrast , british (wrong word. wrong capitalization British is an adjective.) illustrates (wrong word) down (wrong word) ratio (wrong word) in all decades rather had top ratio all time then other countries. (Every word is incorrect)

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To commence with, people of United Kingdom emited carbon dioxide in higher rate from1967 to 2007 instead it downwards constantly all decades, had top rate of emmision all time. Moreover, emission carbon dioxide by swedish illustrates high pace rose up till 1977 then surprisingly declined with crossing over by Italian at 1987. Additionally, the Italian and Portuguese liberated carbon dioxide in parallel manner and provide incline consequences of all decades.

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