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The bar graph depicts the average births per women in six countries in the Gulf region between 1990 and 2000.

Overall, in all gulf nations, the fertility rate decreased over the given period. Whereas Oman and Saudi Arabia registered the highest births per woman, Bahrain and Kuwait had the lowest.

In 1990, Oman accounted for the highest fertility rate with 7 births per women. This was followed by Saudi Arabia with a fertility rate of slightly below that of Oman. After 10 years, both countries' fertility rate fell by around 20% to just over 5 births per women, which was stil the highest among gulf countries in that year.

Regarding the fertility rate of the rest of gulf countries, Qatar and UAE had similar values at around 4 births per women, while Bahrain and Kuwait had about 3.5. By the year 2000, the fertility rates in these countries declined by approximately 15% to ranging within 2 to 3.5 births per women.

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The bar graph (wrong word) depicts the average number of births per women (wrong form) in six countries in the Gulf region between (wrong word) 1990 and 2000. (Incomplete. What are these six countries?)

You need to learn the collocation patterns for the vocabulary word "between."

1. The line graph plots / shows / presents / depicts / gives the population of Rwanda between 1990 and 2000. (Between X and Y - a continuous line from X to Y. This is a decade, a ten-year period of time.)

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2. The bar chart compares the fertility rates of six countries between 1990 and 2000.

Compare data values between point 1 and point 2. These are two separate years. We do not know what happened in between. The year 2000 is one decade (ten years) after 1990.

3. The bar chart plots / shows / presents / depicts / gives the fertility rates of six countries in 1990 and 2000.
Overall, in all gulf nations, the fertility rate decreased ~~over the given period~~. Whereas Oman and Saudi Arabia registered the highest fertility rate ~~births per woman~~, Bahrain and Kuwait had the lowest.

In 1990, Oman accounted for the highest fertility rate with 7 births per women. (wrong form) This was followed by Saudi Arabia with a fertility rate of slightly below that of Oman. After 10 years, both countries' fertility rate fell by around 20% to just over 5 births per women, (wrong form) which was stil the highest among gulf countries in that year.

Regarding the fertility rate of the rest of the gulf countries, (these countries) Qatar and UAE had similar values at around 4 births per women, (wrong form) while Bahrain and Kuwait had about 3.5. By the year 2000, the fertility rates in these countries had declined by approximately 15%, to ranging within 2 to 3.5 births per women. (wrong form)

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