Please review my Task 1 - Bar chart [S_1B_03]

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The given bar chart compares the typical daily amount of SO2 and N2O which cause air pollution in four different areas in the year 2000.The given bar chart compares the typical daily amount of SO2 and N2O which cause air pollution in four different areas in the year 2000Overall, Mexico City had the highest average levels of both pollutants. It is also apparent that the disparity between the four figures was the most modest in Calcutta.Turning to detail, the largest and smallest quantities of SO2 and N2O released in Los Angeles followed an ascending order, 2 mcg/m3, 10 mcg/m3, 39 mcg/m3, and 104 mcg/m3, respectively. Meanwhile, in Mexico City, the amount of N2O peaked at approximately 207 mcg/m3, nearly double that of Los Angeles. Although the maximum figure for SO2 was slightly smaller in this city, at 200 mcg/m3, it still suffered from the worst air quality among the four locations.On the contrary, the amount of pollution caused by N2O eclipsed that of SO2 in Calcutta and Beijing. The data for Calcutta, in terms of both emissions, hovered between 30 and 60 mcg/m3, whereas Beijing witnessed figures varying from 14 to 100 mcg/m3.Word count: 172 words

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TASK 1 - BAR CHART - #03

The chart below shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of two air pollutants in four big cities in 2000.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

The ~~given~~ bar chart (Do not use "given" or "provided." This is not native English.) compares the typical daily amount (wrong form - these two gasses are not combined into one single measurement. ) of SO2 and N2O which cause air pollution (You must set this clause off with commas. It is a non-defining, non-restrictive, non-essential clause. Otherwise, you are saying that there are portions of these gasses that are not pollutants, and the chart only records those portions that are dangerous.) in four different areas (what are they? Your paragraph is incomplete.) in the year 2000 (missing punctuation)

Opening paragraph:

The bar chart compares the minimum and maximum daily amounts of the polluting gasses SO2 and N2O in four different cities ( Mexico City, Los Angeles, Calcutta and Beijing) in 2000. The units of measure are micrograms per cubic meter (mcg/m3).

Overall, Mexico City had the highest average levels of both pollutants, its minimum NO2 being higher than the maximum NO2 in any other city. ~~It is also apparent that~~ Also the ~~disparity~~ differences between the minimums and maximums ~~four figures~~ was the least ~~most modest~~ in Calcutta.

Turning to detail, the largest and smallest (wrong words) measured quantities of SO2 and N2O ~~released~~ in Los Angeles followed an ascending order, (That makes no sense. Maximums are always greater than minimums, by definition. ) 2 mcg/m3, 10 mcg/m3, 39 mcg/m3, and 104 mcg/m3, respectively. Meanwhile, in Mexico City, the amount of N2O peaked (wrong word ) at approximately 207 mcg/m3, nearly double that of Los Angeles. Although the maximum value ~~figure~~ for SO2 was slightly smaller in this city (Los angeles? "This refers to the most recently named city. It is not Mexico City.) , at 200 mcg/m3, it still ~~suffered from the~~ (Figures do not suffer. They have no feelings.) represented the worst air quality among the four ~~locations~~.

On the contrary, (incorrect use of transition phrase. There is no idea of what this is opposite to. You have to state this clearly, e.g. In Mexico City and Los Angeles there were higher levels of N2O than SO2. ) the amount of pollution caused by N2O eclipsed that of SO2 in Calcutta and Beijing. The data for Calcutta, in terms of both emissions, hovered between 30 and 60 mcg/m3, whereas Beijing ~~witnessed~~ showed values ~~figures~~ varying from 14 to 100 mcg/m3.

Example essay:

The bar chart compares the minimum and maximum daily amounts of the polluting gasses SO2 and N2O in four different cities ( Mexico City, Los Angeles, Calcutta and Beijing) in 2000. The units of measure are micrograms per cubic meter (mcg/m3).

Overall, Mexico City had the highest average levels of both pollutants, its minimum NO2 being higher than the maximum NO2 in any of the other cities. Also the differences between the minimums and maximums was the least in Calcutta.

In detail, there were higher levels of N2O than SO2 in Mexico City and Los Angeles, while the opposite was true for the other two cities. Mexico City had measured maximum values that were nearly twice that of the next highest in the other cities. For example, N2O was 207 mcg/m3 compared to 104 in Los Angeles and SO2 was 200 mcg/m3 compared to 100 in Beijing. Los Angeles had significantly low levels of SO2, ranging between a minimum of 2 and a maximum of 10. This can be compared with the next highest minimum and maximum, Beijing at 25 and Calcutta at 59, respectively.

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