Please review my short essay

Topic: A mistake that taught me an important lesson

My answer:

Five months ago, I made a very stupid mistake because of my naivety. When I was a freshman, I was looking for a part-time job on the YBOX website. I found a recruitment announcement for a seller employee position in the Sakura department store, so I called them to ask it is vacant and they said it is still vacant. I felt very excited and then they gave me an address and made an appointment to interview. I thought it is just a normal company until I knew it is a disguised multilevel company.

The next morning, I went to that company to interview. That interview went off well and I was offered a job. Then they asked me to have to take part in three days of training a new employee course in the next day. I was taught about products, working stipulation when I participated in the training course, everything happened normally. One day, my instructor gave me a chance to become a business professional. At first, I was a bit hesitant and I changed my mind when she introduced me wonderful fringe benefits. They promised me that they would help me make a lot of money in 2-3 months and can be a millionaire in one year but I have to pay a big amount of money which they called it is business capital and I trusted them like sheep. After that, everyone in the company was nice to me, they greeted me when I came to the company and they trained me how to be a businessman. At that time, I thought my life was changed. Suddenly, when I was at home, I saw a warning post about a disguised multilevel company and it is a company where I was working. I was super shocked at that time.

After that, I cut off contact with them instantly and post it on Facebook to warn everyone. Also, my family knew this and they just gave me some advice. To be honest, it is one of the most unforgettable experiences. The lesson I learned from my mistake is that you should not be confiding and it’s not easy to make a lot of money. I had to pay 3.250.000 VND to learn that lesson.