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Alexempire Posted 20 years ago

Please review my poem

Please review the poem itself not punctuation, spelling, etc...

Here it is:

My face has many details
My face has many details. My hair to start, my hair has the brownness of a young stag (reminisce of Bambi). It has many fluffs, though is very straight. Straight like a ruler .It has the depth of light as well. Now my eyes, there are a camera with the lenses in the middle and all the other stuff on the side. My cheeks are deep, but limited. They are thin but a structural bone changes their shape. My eyebrow is dark like the night and is connected at the center by a row of small hairs. My eyelashes convey a dark sense of mood, a far away mood distant but still inventible. My nose has the sharpness of a blade and the dullness of a toy. My lip is long but connected to my face and conveys a mystical part and understanding of friendship. My skull is a round indented protector of life I could not live without oh no! My ears are silo absorbing any noise they come into to contact with transporting the sound to my brain which in mere seconds time gives me a repy. My chin is the fore stander, the defender it protects and does so greatly. I feel a sense of safety because of it and a feel that makes it intimidate the other face parts. My cheekbones are the strangest, making a sort of V of it at the top being wider and closing the distance every centimeter. My forehead is flat but still out parting. My face is omniscient a fairy wandering through the ever winding road of life it has taken much abuse and much love but I now say that I am happy about the way my face looks like.
  

Top answer

I wouldn't say this is a poem. This is prose.

  • I wouldn't say this is a poem.
  • This is prose.
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I wouldn't say this is a poem. This is prose.
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yep this is not a poem:S
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You are creating a rather odd mix of the straightforward description and poetic language.

Half of it reads like a police report:

hair: straight

and the other half like something out of a romantic novel:

a fairy wandering through the ever winding road of life
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Nona The BritThis is prose.
Strongly agree with u..

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