Please review my personal profile from application form

0 Hi! I have a following problem and need your help. I am filling the form for applying to the MSc studies in an international faculty and I am supposed to write my personal profile, my goals and my motivation for applying to that program (all in the separate fields with limited space to write). It is very important to me so I need your opinion on these pieces I wrote. They are all of about the same size as space left on the form. 02br
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00I have graduated at the Faculty of Electronic Engineering, University of …, Country, with Distinction as the 1st in the class of 200 students and received a title of Graduate Electrical Engineer (BSc) for Computer Science and Informatics. During my undergraduate studies I was an active member of two student organizations with different areas of their interest (student exchanges and student problems). Since I was on a two student exchanges, in 0100. I had the opportunity to polish my fluency in English and to meet with different cultures and customs. Helping students in solving their problems I learned to present my ideas and improved my communication skills. 02br
00After my graduation I started to work as a research associate in the laboratory for MSDN at the faculty of my origin. Since then I have worked on a number of practical and scientific assignments related to embedded systems and FPGA design of small digital systems. During that time I developed a broad set of skills and the ability to collaborate effectively with researchers who have many different personalities and work styles. 02br
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00My goals: 02br
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00My objective is to become a certified expert in the area of E… Systems design. I assume that for achieving that goal I will need additional education from both software technologies and electronic engineering as well as obtaining practical experience in that areas. As I have read from S. Master’s program presentation that it offers exactly what I have need of I feel very enthusiastic about the possibility of participating in that program. After completing the Master’s program I plan to pursue a career of an E… Systems designer in one of the leading companies in Europe, and then to become the leader of a successful E… Systems design team. 02br
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00My motivation: 02br
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00As my scientific interest is primarily related to embedded systems design I believe that knowledge I will obtain by this program will be of key importance for my future career. Since this program is an international one, I’m also excited to have a chance of meeting outstanding students from other countries and cultures that have the same scientific interest. I was on a short (3 weeks) student exchange in 00 last year and had the opportunity to familiarize myself with the way of living and studying there. This furthermore encouraged me in decision to continue my studies in 00. 02br
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