Please review my paragraph

Topic: In about 140, write a paragraph about the advantages of working at home

My paragraph:

These days with the advances in technology, many people tend to work at home instead of commuting because of several advantages. First, they can save some expenses such as fuel, uniforms and meals. For instance, the prices of lunch are very expensive if they work in large cities or downtown. When working at home, they can prepare food by themselves thereby saving money. Furthermore, the childcare expense can be eliminated since parents can look after them at home. Second, they will not be distracted by office noises such as phones ringing, co-workers talking or equipment running; therefore, they can focus more on their tasks. Additionally, they can sometimes step away from the desk and take breaks when they need. In this way, they can reduce burn-out and work more effectively. Finally, they can avoid getting stuck in traffic congestion, which makes them get angry and in a bad mood. In conclusion, with these benefits, telecommuting is becoming more and more popular with workers.