Please review my motivation letter

Hello,

I am a student from Romania and I want to apply for a Masters Degree in Computer Science at one of the Universities in Denmark. I understand that the motivation letter is crucially important, so I will appreciate if you take the time to give me some advice and suggest correction of grammar errors, style or structure of text. Thank you all!


To The Selection Committee:

I am a Romanian student, in the last year (5^th) at ‘Politehnica’ , Computer Science Department. For the first 3 years of university I have been studying subjects of general interest (most of them were compulsory) in computer science, but in the 4^th year I had the opportunity to choose my profile, and I took systems with microprocessors because I am passionate about that domain. Therefore I am applying to a master in computer science and engineering at DTU, knowing that the Embedded and distributed systems line of study will certainly help me improve my skills as a programmer and thoroughly study this domain.

I grew up in the wonderful wilderness of Danube Delta, the place my father had chosen for building a summer camp for poor children from all over the country. During summers I would help, as a voluntary, my parents to run the camp. The main responsibility I was in charged with, was to organize the daily activity program (games, swimming, fishing, music, etc). In 2006, I started a special program with local children teaching them computers and English weekly (it is still ongoing at the moment). Children are infinite resources of energy, that is why working with them forced me to develop my sportive skills : I took archery, wall climbing and skiing courses, I built a ropes course, etc. On one hand, it taught me discipline, responsibility, commitment and teamwork, on the other hand, I learnt to value every person around me, no matter the look on their face or the social statute, I realised that a truly sincere smile on my face impresses more than Maxwell equation out of my mouth. When I went to for University studies, I got involved in a non-profit student organization named O.S.C.E.B, organizing ski and English camps and other student specific activities.

As a student at UPB I had to face high competition and challenging tasks, that taught me perseverance, hard working and self teaching. I also tried to expand my engineer profile offered by UPB, so I took a Java Course at CISCO academy, extra classes of Political Thinking History, Religion History, Marketing and Sales, Pedagogy. I could better understand the context I am living in and develop practical skills for facing it ( political and economical problems). I took the challenge to teach Computer Programming for middle school students ( grade 6, 12 years old ), experience that involved very good synthesis and analytical ability. I also had the opportunity to be the ‘project manager’ for several university projects, statute that helped me improve my interpersonal skills : clear and effective communication, meaningful and helpful interaction, positive attitude.



I am determined to continue my studies as I am fascinated and passioned by engineering, especially by embedded systems. I am confident that your university provides the environment and resources needed to achieve my goals.



Thank you for considering my application request. I look forward to your favourable response.



Sincerely yours,

Mirela Dinu