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Dear Sir or Madam,
I appreciate this opportunity to provide further background information in support of my application for Master in International Tourism management at Hochschule Bremen University of Applied Science.
I graduated from Economic Department of Gadjah Mada University (UGM) on February 19,2008. To support my academic background, I spent my time to attend many activities. I was a tresurer for Marketing Students Organization (HIMMAPER) and coordinated some others activities. I also worked as Senior High School mathematic tutor at Primagama group Yogyakarta for two years. The past nine months I worked at Pulau Weh – Sabang Tourism Association. The goal is to Develope new sector of tourism in order to provide job for local people and enticing a dynamic entrepreneurship culture post tsunami and conflict. I also responsible for promoting Pulau Weh through website and organize training for local people the skill they need in the tourism industry. The experiences mentioned above has improved my leadership, communication skill, conflict management, ability to work under pressure and unsupervised.
Aceh has many natural resources which not yet developed. Pulau Weh is one of the best resource for tourism industry, it possesses many charms, on land and beneath the sea, as well as within its culture and built environment. Pulau Weh has just enough infrastructure and tourism facilities to readily envision that further development would transform it into a popular destination for Indonesian and foreign tourists alike. But it doesn’t has professional human resource to develop it. Which is the reason I applied for MBA in International Tourism at Hochschule Bremen University of Applied Science to learn more knowledge about tourism development and applied it in Aceh and Pulau Weh (Sabang) Specially.
I enclose a curriculum vitae and a reference from the Dean of Economic Faculty of Gadjah Mada University, Chairman of Pulau Weh – Sabang Tourism Association and other requirements. Please contact me if you require any further details or documents. I hope to hear from you in the near future.
Sincerely yours
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Dear Sir or Madam,
I appreciate this opportunity to provide further background information in support of my application for Master in International Tourism management at Hochschule Bremen University of Applied Science.
I graduated from Economic Department of Gadjah Mada University (UGM) on February 19,2008. To support my academic background, I spent my time to attend many activities. I was a tresurer for Marketing Students Organization (HIMMAPER) and coordinated some others activities. I also worked as Senior High School mathematic tutor at Primagama group Yogyakarta for two years. The past nine months I worked at Pulau Weh – Sabang Tourism Association. The goal is to Develope new sector of tourism in order to provide job for local people and enticing a dynamic entrepreneurship culture post tsunami and conflict. I also responsible for promoting Pulau Weh through website and organize training for local people the skill they need in the tourism industry. The experiences mentioned above has improved my leadership, communication skill, conflict management, ability to work under pressure and unsupervised.
Aceh has many natural resources which not yet developed. Pulau Weh is one of the best resource for tourism industry, it possesses many charms, on land and beneath the sea, as well as within its culture and built environment. Pulau Weh has just enough infrastructure and tourism facilities to readily envision that further development would transform it into a popular destination for Indonesian and foreign tourists alike. But it doesn’t has professional human resource to develop it. Which is the reason I applied for MBA in International Tourism at Hochschule Bremen University of Applied Science to learn more knowledge about tourism development and applied it in Aceh and Pulau Weh (Sabang) Specially.
I enclose a curriculum vitae and a reference from the Dean of Economic Faculty of Gadjah Mada University, Chairman of Pulau Weh – Sabang Tourism Association and other requirements. Please contact me if you require any further details or documents. I hope to hear from you in the near future.
Sincerely yours
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Your letter is basically a good one and though I won't go through it sentence by sentence I will give you some basic suggestions to improve it. 1) Use spell check so you can avoid misspelling "treasurer" and other words 2) Check and make consistent your capitalization. If the program is called "International Tourism Management" make sure to capitalize accordingly.
- Your letter is basically a good one and though I won't go through it sentence by sentence I will give you some basic suggestions to improve it.
- 1) Use spell check so you can avoid misspelling "treasurer" and other words 2) Check and make consistent your capitalization.
- If the program is called "International Tourism Management" make sure to capitalize accordingly.
- ) high school" should be capitalized.
- 3) Cut out as many unnecessary words and phrases as you can.
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Your letter is basically a good one and though I won't go through it sentence by sentence I will give you some basic suggestions to improve it.
1) Use spell check so you can avoid misspelling "treasurer" and other words
2) Check and make consistent your capitalization. If the program is called "International Tourism Management" make sure to capitalize accordingly. Also I don't see a reas
1) Use spell check so you can avoid misspelling "treasurer" and other words
2) Check and make consistent your capitalization. If the program is called "International Tourism Management" make sure to capitalize accordingly. Also I don't see a reas
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