Please review my introdution in IELTS essay TASK 2. Thank you very much
TOPIC:
People should look after their health for personal benefits, rather than a duty for a society. What extent do you agree or disagree?
My intro:
It is a heated debate whether people should care about their well-being for their own benefits or for social responsibilities. I believe that both purposes are important and people should take an interest in both.
Top answer
minhthu9999 It is a heated debate That is a memorized response. There is no "heated debate". Do not use such phrases in IELTS essays, unless the instructions specifically express a similar idea.
- minhthu9999 It is a heated debate That is a memorized response.
- There is no "heated debate".
- Do not use such phrases in IELTS essays, unless the instructions specifically express a similar idea.
- Students who memorize certain phrases and responses will not get good scores.
- Also, you did not answer the ungrammatical essay prompt adequately.
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minhthu9999It is a heated debate
That is a memorized response. There is no "heated debate". Do not use such phrases in IELTS essays, unless the instructions specifically express a similar idea. Students who memorize certain phrases and responses will not get good scores.
Also, you did not answer the ungrammatical essay prompt adequately. Here
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