Please review my IELTS Writing task 2

Today, the high sales of popular goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real need of the society in which they are sold. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, people said that the influence of the advert creates more profitable on sales and not without the real needs of the community. While I partly agree that there will be undoubtedly some possitive results for this trend. I, however, strongly believe that some actions should be implemented to reduce some potential problems.

There are a number of reasons for this phenomenon. Since advertisement is a vital tool for companies to expose good aspects about their products. Thus, it play a key role in persuading potential customers to buy their items. By using visual effects, catchy melody and eye-catching images, the advert draws more consumers’ attentions. For this reasons, it is understandable why advertisement is able to boost more sales for firms and widen their market.

On the other hand, I suppose that the advertising manipulates people. It aims to convince mindless people that buying a product will make them happier. Furthermore, the biggest downside about the advertising is that it seems to be deceptive to show the best value on their products that they may not have. As a result, consumers asre more likely to buy various products that they do not need. This may lead to increase more disposal waste and pollution for environment. I suggest that the governments should regulate some advertising in order to reduce possible issues that it may have.

In conclusion, it can’t be denied that a huge amount of benefits that advertising industry brings to nations. I still believe that it is necessary for authorities to control them in order to the community buy products that they really need.