Please review my IELTS writing task 2

Topic: The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? what are the impacts?

Dinner time or lunch time was used to be the time for family when all the members gathered to talk and share moments of life with each other. However, that tradition of the family are not appeared frequently in the recent years. In this essay, I would like to discuss the reasons and the effects of not having meals together at family.

The reasons why people do not get together at meals in a family may come from both sides of a parent and children. First of all, parents are always busy with work. They have to go to work from 7am till 7pm everyday. Moreover, not only does the time affect to them, but they also have to shoulder the financial burden in order to earn for a living and take care of their families. Due to these reasons, they do not have time for having meals with their kids. Moreover, these situations occur the same with the children. Children have to go to school, sit for an exam and go to extra classes. They may skip or eat quick meal first; therefore, they do not have time to gather with family at dinner or lunch

People do not have time together at meals with family that may have a big repercussion on mental health. Traditionally, people usually gather and share moments with each other at meals, even sometimes this is the time to build self-esteem for a child; thus, if they do not have meals with each other, their feeling of harmony and their emotions will decrease terribly and even it may lead to some psychological issues. For example, family is the most trusted place for people to share their story; hence, when they can not talk or express their feeling, the communication and mood will turn down and they can not feel the harmony or cherish moment; as a result, they will feel being abandon, or feel lonely, or even stressed and cause autism.

In conclusion, people do not get together at meals which is most caused because of the overload with work. Moreover, if this situation happens constantly, the worse of feelings will come to each person.