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The table presents the data about female and male bicycle riders categorised into five age groups: youngest 0-9, teenage 10-17, adult 18-39, middle-aged 40-59, and senior over 60, in a town in the year 2011.
Overall, in all the age groups, the percentage of female cyclists was higher than that of male counterparts. It is also notable that the proportions of middle-aged rider were lowest for both genders.
Looking at the figures for female cyclists, there was 51.3% of young girls aged from 0-9 riding bicycles compared to 42.2% teenage girls aged from 10-17. The proportions of women in adult group 18-39 and middle-aged group 40-59 were relatively low, at 17.1% and 12.3% respectively. Female bike riders who were over 60 accounted for less than a quarter.
Regarding male riders, half of young boys aged 0-9 took part in bicycle riding. Those in the age between 10 and 17 accounted for almost a quarter, while less than 10% of adult male did cycling in two age groups 18-39, and 40-59. There was 13.2% of men aged beyond 60 participating in cycling activity.
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The table presents the data about (vague. This does not tell the reader what the data is. ) female and male bicycle riders categorised into five age groups: youngest children 0-9, teenage rs 10-17, adults 18-39, middle-aged 40-59, and seniors over 60, in a town in the year 2011.
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