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Reducing global environmental damage should be handled by governments rather than individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree? It is believed that governments should tackle decreasing global environmental contamination than individuals. I disagree with this viewpoint because I think that both governments and citizens have to grapple with this problem.On the one hand, some environmental issues are too big for individuals to deal with and only governments can have sufficient funds and resources to handle them. First, some serious problems such as global warming or storms can only be effectively solved by the cooperation of environmentalists. In fact, solving global warming requires large numbers of scientists and special technological devices to find the most effective solutions to solve this problem and it takes years. Second, the governments could pass laws to tackle the roots of environmental damage, for example, limiting the emission from factories and industries, or using renewable energy from solar, water, or wind power as alternatives to fossil fuels.At the same time, I believe that each resident also has a responsibility to reduce environmental pollution. First, people could save the environment by very simple activities such as choosing products with less packaging or recycling and reusing as much as possible. Second, because exhaust fumes from vehicles are the main reason for air pollution, people can switch to eco-friendly fuels such as electricity, biofuels, or batteries. Finally, only when citizens are equipped with sufficient basic knowledge about environmental conservation, can the problem be handled. For instance, if youngsters are aware of the adverse effects of harming the environment from an early age, they probably will not litter the street or use plastic packaging.In conclusion, I believe that governments can implement large-scale initiatives to control environmental issues, but individuals also have a responsibility to conserve the environment.(282 words)

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The examiner is looking for an answer to this question: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is good to know a good handful of adverbs of extent because this is a very common prompt in IELTS Task 2 essays.

Complete agreement / disagreement:
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completely
fully
totally
wholeheartedly
unreservedly
with no reservations
without reservation
unequivocally
unquestionably
with no hesitation
unconditionally

Partial agreement / disagreement:
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somewhat
partially
partly
to some extent / to a limited extent / to a point
with (some / certain / a few) reservations
conditionally

AlpheccaStars · Answer

It is believed that governments should tackle decreasing global environmental contamination (That is not a good natural phrase) than (wrong word -ungrammatical.) individuals.

It is claimed that only governments can reverse the damage that has been done to the environment. Individuals can have very little impact. I agree somewhat with this. Governments can do a lot, but if everyone is aware of the problem and takes action, they can go a long way to solving it.

I disagree with this viewpoint because I think that both governments and citizens have to work together to resolve ~~grapple with~~ this problem.

~~On the one hand,~~ (On the one hand/on the other hand are good phrases for "discuss both sides" or "describe the advantages and disadvantages. They are not very appropriate for opinion essays.) Some environmental issues are too big for individuals to deal with and only governments ~~can~~ have sufficient funds and resources to handle them. First, some serious problems ~~such as global warming~~ (Global warming is not environmental damage. The topic is reducing damage - air pollution, water pollution and excess garbage in landfills are examples of damage.) ~~or storms~~ can only be effectively solved by the cooperation of environmentalists who are working for the government or get grants from the government.. In fact, removing plastic waste from the oceans ~~solving global warming~~ requires large numbers of scientists ~~and special technological devices~~ to find the most effective solutions to solve this problem and it takes years for sophisticated automated water filtering machines to make an impact. Second, the governments could pass laws to tackle the roots of environmental damage, for example, limiting the emission from factories and industries, or ~~using~~ mandating the use of renewable energy from solar, water, or wind power as alternatives to fossil fuels.

At the same time, ~~I believe that~~ (The body paragraphs argue your thesis statement. It is in the first paragraph.) each resident also has a responsibility to put a stop to further damage. ~~reduce environmental pollution~~. First, they ~~people~~ could save the environment by very simple activities such as choosing products with less packaging or recycling and reusing as much as possible. Second, because exhaust fumes from private vehicles are the main reason for air pollution, people can switch to eco-friendly fuels such as electricity, biofuels, or batteries. Finally, only when citizens are equipped with sufficient basic knowledge about environmental conservation, can the problem be handled. For instance, if ~~youngsters~~ children are aware of the adverse effects of harming the environment from an early age, they probably will not litter the street or use plastic packaging. The local governments can add environmental awareness lessons to the school curriculum.

In conclusion, I believe that governments can implement large-scale initiatives to control environmental degradation ~~issues~~, but individuals also have a responsibility to play their part in conservation efforts. ~~to conserve the environment.~~

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