Please review my IELTS task 2 - topic FAMILY & SOCIETY

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Question:

Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? What are the effects on society and family life?

In recent years, starting a family later in life has become emerging issue in the world. There are several reasons for this trend and it has some negative impacts on society and life.

In my opinion, there are two main reasons why people tend to having children late. First, many people want to have more time to enjoy life. As shown in a report of Japanese Lifestyle magazine, more than 60 per cent of interviewees answered that they would not begin childbearing before 35 because they like to experience life before involving family responsibilities. Second, people tend to pursue a successful career or attain their desired level of education before embarking on parenthood. Female PhD students, for instance, are likely to give birth to their first child late because they concentrate on their research when they are young.

This trend has some negative consequences for on society and family life. The first one is that there might be a wide age gap between two generations in families that parents begin childbearing late. Many old men who have first child after 50 admitted that they felt difficult to talk to their offspring when they are teenage. Furthermore, giving birth late can affect children’s physical health and lifespan. According to World Health Organization, children are at greater risk of being Down syndrome if their mothers give birth to them before 40 years old.

In conclusion, the decision to have children later in life results from the change in mindset about life and careers. This trend has some negative impacts on society as well as family life such as wide age gap between children and parents and the decrease of children’s health.