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Topic: Describe a bar chard.

The chart illustrates the number of tourists who visited the city of Dover and Troy in each of the four seasons of 2014.

It can be seen that the number of tourists visiting Dover was higher than that of Troy. In the spring, both Dover and Troy have the fewest visitors, while in the summer, the number of tourists who visited Troy was the highest compared to Dover in the winter.

In Dover, most tourists travel in the winter, about 25,000 tourists compared to only 5,000 tourists in spring. There was a steady increase in the number of visitors from spring to fall, from 5,000 to 15,000 tourists, but later rose significantly to 25,000 tourists in the winter.

In the city of Troy, most tourists visited in the summer (over 20,000 tourists), while in the spring, the number of tourists was just slightly below 5,000, which was the fewest visitors in Troy in all four seasons. From spring to summer, there was a considerable increase in tourists visiting Troy, from under 5,000 to over 20,000 visitors. However, the number dropped slightly in the fall (20,000 tourists) and significantly in winter (5,000 tourists).