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The chart given demonstrates the behavior of consuming coffee and tea in five Australian cities in the last 28 days.

It is evident that while Adelaide's dwellers fancy purchasing instant coffee the most, for the four cities Sydney, Melbourne, Brisban, and Hobart, "going to a cafe for coffee or tea" was the residents' go-to move, followed by "buying instant coffee" and "buying fresh coffee" as the second and third people's favorite, respectively.
To be specific, in the last 4 weeks, an average of nearly 6 out of 10 people in 5 cities opted for buying beverages at a coffee shop. What is more, approximately half of the citizens of all those metropolises consumed processed, powdered coffee. Last but not least, in Sydney and Melbourne, two-fifths of the city dwellers bought fresh coffee, whereas, in Brisban, Adelaide, and Hobart, only roughly 35% of their inhabitants made their drinks from fresh coffee.