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School should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is suggested that foreign language should be an optional subject for children and compelling students to learn it is unreasonable. In my opinion, although there are some disadvantages of this development, I still believe that forcing them to learn a different language will make them broaden their horizon and have an in-depth understanding of other nations.

On the one hand, sometimes when obliging children to do something they are not interested in may make them rebel and oppose. In fact, some students nowadays have aptitudes for various things such as drawing, swimming, or calculating, which are not require knowledge about new languages. Hence, if their schools or parents force them on a path that they are not meant for, children may feel dispirited as well as be prone to stress and in the long-term may adversely affect children mentality.

On the other hand, it is undeniable that the effects of becoming a good language learner will provide tremendous benefits for children. People may argue that compelling them to learn a new language can have counter-productive consequences and lead to some undesirable influences including having a fear of studying; therefore, just let children do what they want and have a flair for. However, not all children nowadays know what they genuinely like and some may do not have enough perseverance to decide their dreams. Hence, learning a foreign language plays an essential part in the future of students. Admittedly, in the globalization period, mastering many languages can offer children have a variety of chances to work at national companies, therefore, they can have a firm career and earn a good living. Furthermore, studying a second language will give children various opportunities to learn about different cultures and costumes, thus it can deepen students’ understanding of other countries.

In conclusion, although there are some demerits in this trend, I firmly believe that schools are of great importance to promoting students learning a new language because of the tremendous benefits it brings to children in general.