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The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now and plans for its development.

The two pictures illustrate the Islip small town currently as well as planning for its development in the future.

Overall, there are significant changes in this town by erecting more amenities and extending the road. The town may then be able to meet the needs of people by offering modern facilities.

The Islip town center for the time being has the path run through from the West to the East and will be developed in the years to come with a new dual carriageway. In addition, the shops in the middle, as well as the park will be planned to narrow, and an area for pedestrians only will be built alongside the shops.

The main change in the plan development in Islip involves the addition of various amenities including Bus station, Shopping center, Car park, and housings to replace the current shops, main road, and countryside area on the top. First, the two new accommodations will be constructed; the first one is to the right-hand corner of the dual carriageway, whereas the second one is in the South East, just next to the park. Furthermore, some changes in the location of current housing will also be made, but the school remains unchanged.