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The pie chart indicates the percentage of graduates with different degrees of science and art in a company between 1990 and 2010.

Overall, at the beginning of the period, the percentage of graduates with Master-art made up the largest piece of the chart, while in the year 2010 the figure for First Degree-Science was contributed the biggest portion. In contrast, the proportion of PhD-Science was the least significant part of the chart in both years.

The figure for First Degree-Art was 18% in 1990, then witnessed an increase of 24% at the end of the period. The proportion of First Degree-Science accounted for 18% in 1990 and experienced a significant climb of 24% making up the biggest portion of the chart after 10 years. There was a slight growth in the percentage of PhD-Science, from 7% at the beginning to 8% in 2010.

The rate of Master-art made up the most significant portion in 1990 then saw a considerable decline of 15% at the end of the period. A small decrease from 20% to 17% was seen in the proportion of Master-science. PhD-art followed a similar trend, the percentage of this degree in 1990 and 2010 was 20% and 17% respectively.