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The line graph below provides information about the incomes of four restaurants in a city in 2010.

The line graph indicates the proceeds of four restaurants from January to December in 2010.

Overall, almost these four restaurants experienced an upward trend through the period, apart from Spicy Fortune. In addition, Evening Paradise witnessed a significant increase in December making it become the highest income restaurant at the end of the period

In terms of Delicacy, the amount of income in this restaurant fluctuated from January to September, then saw a considerable growth since September and reached 100 thousand dollars at the end of the period. Regarding Spicy Fortune, it followed a similar fluctuation trend until October, then the quantity of income in this restaurant plummet to just over 40 thousand dollars in December.

The number of earnings in Grand Fiesta started at 100 thousand dollars and witnessed a slight decrease in February, then plateaued at about 80 thousand dollars until July. From July to December, there was a gradual upturn in the amount of income of Grand Fiesta and at the end of 2010, it reached nearly under 120 thousand dollars. Concerning Evening Paradise, this restaurant began at about 50 thousand dollars becoming the second least amount of earnings in January, but from September onwards, it climbed dramatically and almost peaked at 200 thousand dollars in December.