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Scientists believe that by studying the behavior of three-year-old children, we can predict if that child can become a criminal in the future. To what extent is the crime a product of human nature? Is it possible to stop children from growing to be a criminal?

The psychology and behavior of the toddlers are the results of the interaction between their nature and nurture, which could reflect their personality traits in the future. That’s why the behavioral problems during the first five years are believed to be associated with the forming of children’s future antisocial and criminal tendencies. However, I assume that biological factor just has trivial impacts on their development and should not be considered as the warning sign of future delinquency.

According to recent researches, offenders share some similar personality traits in their childhood that can help forecast their criminality. Generally, these criminals were more aggressive and disruptive than their peers when they were kids. For these reasons, it is understandable why some scientists contend that observing individuals' early years can help predict their antisocial tendencies.

Nevertheless, compared to extrinsic elements, genetic characteristics appear to be less influential on youngsters’ psychology and cognition. Primarily, upbringing and education at a young age are considered as fundamental elements for shaping their perception. That’s why children who are rejected by their parents, grow up in homes with considerable conflict, and are inadequately supervised are at the greatest risk of becoming delinquents. Furthermore, studies also show that children educated in friendly and open schools would conform to the norms and values that schools promote, thereby reducing their probability of forming antisocial behavior.

In conclusion, external rather than internal factors would exert heavy influences on the mindset of children; therefore, early intervention and adjustment should be offered to orientate them not to commit crimes in their adulthood.