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Topic: Failure is proof that desire isn't strong enough.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The public discourse has been of the viewpoint that failure bears testimony to the lack of ambition. In this essay. I wholeheartedly disagree with this statement because of the two reasons that will be elaborated as follows.

Firstly, failure is just a deterrent in human's life. It is only a challenge that people have to cope with to succeed in the future. Take Thomas Edison, who created a number of life-changing inventions, as an example, when he set his sights on inventing light bulbs, he was full of determination to succeed. However, he failed many times and also felt small many times in front of renowned scientists in lots of science conferences when introducing his broken light bulbs. Despite theses challenges, Edison did not give up and he continued to do more researches to know the exact culprits behind his nonsuccess. And he came to fruition after finding the problem lying in the filament. It can be concluded that failure only gives people more ambition to succeed and it does not prove weak desire.

Secondly, when people make every attempt to do something , they go on failing, which indicates that their ability is limited. An athlete who is desirous of getting into the finals of a championship but no matter how hard he trained, he is still defeated from the early beginning. It is not because they are lack of desire, instead it is due to the fact that they cannot push their limits any further,

In conclusion, the two aforementioned reasons give the lie to the opinion that not having enough aspiration is not the main driver behind one's losing.