Please review my IELTS essay (IPTP - TEST 4 - TASK 2)
MY WRITING:
Technological breakthrough currently allows people to download copyrighted music and books from the Internet for free. From my perspective, I somewhat agree in that this trend will be condemned at first, but these values sometimes need sharing as a positive development.
It is inevitable that leaking copyrighted products will offense the authors or composers. As they have to spend a lot of time and efforts devoting to their own clients who are responsible for their main income. Many authors and composers do not accept that their dedications are not respected and they are ready to sue illegal websites for uploading their priced contents.
Both creators and the public, however, can be benefited from this trend. For creators, they will have chances to polish their reputation without any advertising campaigns. Turning to the public, this shows equality amongst all walks of life. These spritual values should not be the monopoly of the rich. In addition, everyone deserves to enjoy precious music and books despite their financial background. Moreover, people can take inspiration from these pieces of work and produce more positive energy to the world.
In conclusion, that copyrighted music and books are widely spread on the Internet has positive effects outweighed its negative side, and creators should be more easy-going with the public in sharing their great extremes of devotion.
(220 words)
*Notes: I really do not know how to continue to lengthen my essays until word limit (250 words). Therefore, please check my essays carefully and help me fix this problem. Thanks a lot!
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Technological breakthrough (you need to give a description of the situation. ) People have created websites that store recorded music, video and even scanned copies of printed books. Users anywhere in the world can upload pirated digital copies, even though the material is copyrighted.
- Technological breakthrough (you need to give a description of the situation.
- ) People have created websites that store recorded music, video and even scanned copies of printed books.
- Users anywhere in the world can upload pirated digital copies, even though the material is copyrighted.
- The website indexes all the titles and makes it searchable by Google and other search engines.
- That gives the capability for anyone with an internet connection to download any copies for themselves at no charge.
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Technological breakthrough (you need to give a description of the situation. It is not "technological breakthoughs; it is the cooperative effort of various groups of people that enable this situation to exist..) People have created websites that store recorded music, video and even scanned copies of printed books. Users anywhere in the world ca
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