Please review my IELTS essay (CAM 16 - TEST 4 - TASK 1)
WRITING TASK 1:
MY WRITING:
The diagram illustrates the process in which plastic bottles are recycled.
At the initial steps, plastic bottles are manually sorted at recycling centre after having been collected from rubbish bins and delivered by a big garbage truck to that destination. After that, all sorted plastic bottles are compressed into enormous blocks which look like rubiks. Then, these plastics blocks are crushed by circular saws into tiny pieces and submerged in a big vat of liquid to wash.
In the next stage, tiny plastic pieces continue to be squashed into plastics pellets by a machine after having been cleaned. This is followed by the heating stage when plastics pellets are heated until melting before completely turning into raw material. Finally, raw material recycled from plastic bottles starts a new life cycle in the shapes of familiar products we see in the shops, for example, clothes, pens, bags or even plastic bottles as they were in trash cans at first.
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The diagram illustrates the process in which plastic bottles are recycled. Your are missing the "main features" paragraph, as specified in the instructions. All you have is the tiny details, so you will lose points for not following the task instructions.
- The diagram illustrates the process in which plastic bottles are recycled.
- Your are missing the "main features" paragraph, as specified in the instructions.
- All you have is the tiny details, so you will lose points for not following the task instructions.
- Here is a "main features" paragraph.
- Overall, it is a cyclical process with nine steps, as shown in the diagram.
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The diagram illustrates the process in which plastic bottles are recycled.
Your are missing the "main features" paragraph, as specified in the instructions. All you have is the tiny details, so you will lose points for not following the task instructions. Here is a "main features" paragraph.
Overall, it is a cyclical process with nine steps, a
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