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The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below presents the data about the enrolment of students in Manchester United. This essay was collected in 1937, 1967 and 2017 and would indicate key observations of the given figure.

Overall, the number of students enrolled that went up considerably from 327 to 6254 students over the course of 80 years (between 1937 and 2017). The proportion of students in terms of being female and overseas that experienced remarkably while there was a strong decline in those about being male and regional.

As can be seen from this table, the ratio of female and male students commenced, being 45% and 55% respectively in the first stage of the period (1937). Featuring a notable change, in 2017, the percentage of female students transformed the last position together with those of male students (55% versus 45%) rather than the beginning stage.

To begin with, British students who started any given years with 55% and Manchester United could attract the number of international students with only 6% in 1937. The regional students accounted for the lowest proportion among 4 kinds of students (only 1-2%) in 2017. Another noteworthy observation, the number of local students plunged and reached the bottom with nearly 1-2% while those of international students grew significantly to 32% at the end of the given period (2017).