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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

The given chart gives information on Australia's unemployment situation in four months of 2012 in percentage.

In general, the ratio of unemployees in urban areas saw an upward trend through quarters of the year. An opposite picture was seen in the rural areas’ unemployees ratio.

In detail, the proportion of Australian unemployees in rural areas plunged by twice in the first two months, and then increased slightly to 5,5% in the third month. Finally, it stayed unchanged at 5% in the fourth month.

When it comes to urban areas, more and more people are unemployed. The ratio of them was above 2% in the first month and it reached its highest point in the fourth month, about 4.9%.