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topic:

The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words

my essay

The given pie charts provide information on the global consumption, production, and profit distribution of coffee-related businesses across the world.


As it is represented in the pie charts while Japan is the third-largest consumer of coffee by 8% it is noteworthy, that on the other hand, is the third-largest producer of coffee as well. 18%of global production of coffee takes place in japan surpassing Vietnam with 16%and being below Indonesia which harvest 22% of consumed coffee .what comes as a surprise is that although south Africa by 44% is the significant source of coffee around the world, the main consumers of coffee are Europeans and Americans by 41% and 39% respectively. rest of the world hardly intake 12%of the provided coffee.

In the case of profit distribution, the marketplace is dominated by delivery taking the major portion of 51 %under its control. accordingly, the retailers' share is approximately a quarter, and 15% of the total goes to the producers whilst exporters get merely 10% of the entire income.