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The graph compares the levels of post-school qualifications based on gender in terms of five different categories in Australia in 1999.

As a whole, men outnumbered of women in three out of five levels of post-school educational attainments, namely skilled vocational diploma, postgraduate diploma and master's degree. While more females achieved two other qualifications than their male counterpart, which are bachelor's degree and undergraduate diploma.

According to the data presented in the chart, there was a predomination in the percentage of male completed skilled vocational diploma, accounting for 90% compare to only 10% in women. The proportion of woman obtained undergraduate diploma went for the highest among five levels in terms of women, which was over 70%. Half of that percentage indicated the ratio of male who got this degree. Moreover, in Bachelor's degree, there was nearly the same percentages between males and females, accounting for 48% and 55%, respectively. It was worth noting that though many females completed their bachelor's degree, the percentages decrease when it come to postgraduate diploma and master's level by 30% and 20%. Whereas 70% of males were attended their postgraduate level and 60% of them achieved master's one.