Please review my IELTS essay

Write an email and describing yourself or a person you know.

Hi Ngoc,

My name’s Luong. Currently, I am a freshman, I have just been matriculated into VIETNAM AVIATION ACADEMY. My hometown is a port city name Cam Ranh which has a huge amount of seafood and a variety of seasonal fruits. I really love my city because the people here are friendly, hospitable. it also has fresh air, unlike many industrial cities. I live with my family now and enjoy my peaceful life here.

I will tell you more about myself. The main job of my family is fishing. I frequently take part in the jobs so my skin looks a bit swarthy. I am quite tall. My hair is curly. People usually say that I really resemble my father, especially the brown eyes.

I am a sociable person. I like sharing stories and experiences with my friends. I'm always willing to listen to their problem and try to help them as possible.

Last week, I need to complete my deadline, so I have to burn the midnight oil. But this week, I have so much leisure time. Reading books and having snacks would be a good way to unwind. My favorite type of book is detective novels and history. I also relish the moment of hanging out with friends, having an engaging chatting. Finally, it’s my pleasure to make friends with you. If you have a chance to visit my city, I am truly ready to show you around my hometown. Hope you can see this email soon and tell me about you. I look forward to seeing your response.

Regards,

Nguyen Van Luong