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Topic: The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The flow chart illustrates the main stages by which instant noodles are produced.

Overall, manufacturing instant noodles is an automated process and consists of eight stages, starting with storing the raw ingredients and ending with the final products being labeled and sealed before being sold to end users.

The first stage involves pumping flour from a truck to the storage silos. It is then transported to the factory and mixed with other ingredients, namely water and oil, at which point the rollers shape the resulting mixture into dough sheets. Next, they are sliced into several dough strips and continue moving on the conveyor belt before being formed into circular shapes called noodle discs. Subsequently, they are deep-fried in cooking oil and left to dry. These noodle discs are then put into mass-produced cups, after which vegetables and spices are then added to improve the flavor. Finally, the cups are labeled and sealed and they are now ready to be sold.