Please review my IELTS essay
Topic: Many people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have had a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Introduction:
It is said that social media such as Facebook, Twitter, Instagram have had many detrimentals on both every single person and society. In my opinion, these social networking sites play a crucial in human's life in the flat world now, however, they have some backwards.
Top answer
It is said that (Avoid these passive-it constructions) social media such as Facebook, Twitter, Instagram have had many detrimentals (Detrimental is an adjective. ) on both every single person and society. In my opinion, these social networking sites play a crucial (Crucial is an adjective.
- It is said that (Avoid these passive-it constructions) social media such as Facebook, Twitter, Instagram have had many detrimentals (Detrimental is an adjective.
- ) on both every single person and society.
- In my opinion, these social networking sites play a crucial (Crucial is an adjective.
- ) life in the flat (wrong word.
- ) however, they have some backwards .
Get the Weekly English Kit 📬
New words, one handy idiom, and a 2-minute quiz — delivered to your inbox to keep your streak alive.
It is said that (Avoid these passive-it constructions) social media such as Facebook, Twitter, Instagram have had many detrimentals (Detrimental is an adjective. It is not a noun.) on both every single person and society. In my opinion, these social networking sites play a crucial
0Example opening paragraph:
There is a widespread opinion that social media have had a net detrimental effect on communities as well as individuals. From personal experience, I can sympathize with this view; however I cannot wholeheartedly endorse it.
"wholeheartedly" is a good adverb of extent. It is not used very often, although all native speakers know it.
0
Related Questions