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Topic: Research has shown that overeating is as harmful as smoking. Therefore, the advertising of certain food products should be banned in the same way as the advertising of cigarettes in some countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Obesity and overweight status are becoming increasingly in modern life. Some people argue that overeating is as unhealthy as smoking. Hence, the marketing of certain food product on television should be prohibited as the way of advertising of cigarettes in some nations. This essay will discuss why overeating is harmful and I completely disagree to ban advertising of foods.

Excessive eating is harmful to health because body must intake a large amount of foods at the same time. In addition, sedentary lifestyle without a reasonable exercise regimen can cause some health-related issues such as blood pressure and high cholesterol. Furthermore, thanks to modern busy lifestyles, time seems to be an important factor. More and more family households tend to consume fast food to save time rather than cook and prepare healthy meals. This cause a rapid increase of obesity and weigh gain in population.

There are two main reasons why food advertising should not be banned as the advertising of cigarettes. One reason is that eating is a compulsory requirement to maintain life, compared to smoking cigarette is a recreational activity. Therefore, advertising helps variety of food products, hence people have a way to choose appropriate food and bring benefit for health. Furthermore, prohibiting advertising of food products is not fair to manufacturers because nature of the advertising of certain food products are to introduce their products to clients. In fact, it is not harmful to customers unlike nicotine in tobacco.

In conclusion, it seems to me that overeating without exercising is not good for health, however government should not ban the advertising of foodstuffs.