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Topic: fast-food companies should not be allowed to give away free toys with their food.To what extent do you agree or disagree.
My task:
There should not be allowance for fast-food companies to give away chargeless toys with their food. In my opinion, I sit on the fence because of some reasons below.
For a start, with the development of advanced technology, toy companies can produce many kind of plaything and they are sold in many markets and stores. Those that have good quality are very expensive and obviously, free toys have poor quality. They can affect consumers'health. Therefore fast-food companies should not be allowed to give away free toys with their food.
Beside, I also disagree with this. Fast-food companies do that for commercial purposes. Many people want to buy things on the house or with sales. Consequently, of fast-food companies give away free toys, they will attract more consumers.
Admittedly, free toys can affect consumers'health, but they do that all to make benefits. I am of the opinion that fast-food companies can give away free toys with their food on some special occasions, but not always.
To sum up, I agree with this. On the other hand, I disagree with this.
Top answer
You wrote less than 200 words. The minimum is 250 words. You will not get a good score.
- You wrote less than 200 words.
- The minimum is 250 words.
- You will not get a good score.
- ) with their food.
- In my opinion, I sit on the fence because of some reasons below .
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You wrote less than 200 words. The minimum is 250 words. You will not get a good score.
Also "sit on the fence" is not a good answer to the question "to what extent do you agree?"
There should not be allowance (wrong usage) for fast-food companies to give away chargeless
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