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TOPIC Task 2 (IELTS): Some people take one long vacation each year. Others take several short vacations. Which do you prefer and why? Give details and example to support your explanations.

My essay

A number of people have a long holiday once a year, whereas others consider they should a lot of short vacations. This essay will discuss about the benefits and drawbacks of both side, share my opinion about the argument above.

On one hand, a long vacation will help them not only travel many places around the world but also have many times to excursion with their family. But maybe it is difficult to arrange vacation schedule for all participant because they always have more and more works everyday. Besides that, I think these holidays need them to prepare carefully more and more money.

On the other hand, I think that extremely is a good solution for busy people. For example, during days in the end of week, they can easy go to nearly places with need not a lot of money, but it is so hard to have some vacations far from their city. Personally, I would like a short break more than long, because I can not request a long vacation from ten to fifteen days with my company. However, I think I still organize a long holiday after many years to restart my mind and emotion for my pressure at work.

To sum up, when we are you, we should go more and more because each vacation always makes us experiences about culture, history and human from these countries.