Please review my IELTs essay

Topic:

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

My essay:

Nowadays, protecting the environment has become one of the most burning issues the public concerned about. While people deem that it is the responsibility of the government and big companies to protect the environment because they hold the power and resources necessary while individuals are too feeble to make much effort, I think that individuals can make a difference.

First, the most important thing must be the effect on big companies caused by public awareness and habits. Specifically, environmentally-friendly behaviors from the community can influence on business strategies of these companies. For instance, when disposable plastic bags are not popular anymore, manufacturers will stop their production and find eco-friendly replacements such as fabric bags. Thus, the power of individuals is maximized and makes a big difference.

Second, while children both bear brunt of climate change impact and have chance to improve its appalling state in the future, daily interaction with children enables each parent to influence on them profoundly. Thus, playing role model in environmental protection for children by each parent can drive a major force in generating environmental preservation motivation.

However, this is not to say that we should ignore the responsibility of the government and big companies. Admittedly, in solving large-scale environmental problems such as deforestation and hunting of wild animals, the government and big companies should harness their technology and power to come up with strategic plans.

In summary, everyone is responsible in protecting our planet. Meanwhile, the government and big companies should shoulder their responsibility and make full use of their power and resources available. Only in this way can we assure that we can hand over the planet to our next generation