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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Write at least 250 words.

My essay:

Children are the future of society. Their fate lies in the hands of their parents and school. Both of them play key roles in kids’ personality.

Parents are the first persons who children know and interact with them, undoubtedly. They are the first teachers who train their kids. Psychologists believe that about 80% of human personality form in the first ages (until 4-year-old). During this period, children are very keen observer and always try to imitate their mothers and fathers’ behavior. So, parents should be careful about their behavior and expressions.

Although most of the parents think that it’s their duty to make their children as good members for society, some of them go to work and do not have enough time to teach every thing to their children. Also, they may not face to all society’s problems in their life. So, schools, as a second home, should be considered as an important place to learn good and relevant things for children. Schools can provide a good environment and teachers can cover different topics of society and train children gradually. In addition, teachers are professional to understand and know children in details, and hence, they can guide them truly. What is more, pupils can join to the different groups and learn many things as a team member. Also, they interact with their peers. As a result of this, they can improve their attitudes.

In conclusion, to teach children how to be good members of society, parents and schools play significant roles. They should be considered serious factors that affect children directly.