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Simsim937 Posted 6 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Please review my essay. Thank you so much.

In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and smartphones, more and more people are starting to work from home.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

Write at least 250 words.

My essay:

In today digital word, myriad people prefer to work from home, and work-from-home jobs are more popular than the past that people had to travel to their place of work. Some persons think it is a dream, but not always. Before making a decision, you need to know about theses jobs’ advantages and disadvantages.

One of the biggest advantages working from home has brought to people is having a flexible schedule. Imagine, you can your works while you are lying on the sofa with a pajama. You can also take a break every time you want (without office distraction and chatty co-workers). As a result of these, you would have more time with your family, ready for your kids and see their upbringing.

Another great advantage of doing your works at home is that you forget crowds and traffic forever. You can also save more money by deletion of fare and lunch expenses. Furthermore, you eat delicious and healthy food at home.

In contrast, there are many drawbacks to works bringing to home. The most significant thing is that you have a bed to bed life and being at home all the time would be incredibly boring and monotonous. As a result, such life would make lack of community for you. So, you may become depressed, lazy and lose your passion.

Sometimes, you should wait for an answer, because you do not have access to the whole files. You as well as are far away from your work’s competitive environment and cannot work your way up the career ladders very well and get a good promotion. Therefore, you may lose your responsibility and work ethic.

In conclusion, although increased use of technologies have made working from home easy, but it has many serious disadvantages, which are extensive irreplaceable and irreparable.

  

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  • Your first paragraph does not impress this reader.
  • Look how many problem areas it has.
  • ) myriad people (wrong expression.
  • There are poor people, rich people, happy people and nice people.
  • There is no such thing as myriad people.
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Your first paragraph does not impress this reader. Look how many problem areas it has.


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