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The diagram shows how a type of tent called a tepee is built.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

My essay:

The diagram shows the eight important stages in the making of a type tent, called a tepee. The process begins with forming a tripod by tying three long sticks, and finishes with fixing the canvas to the ground to form a tepee.

Firstly, you need the same three long sticks to tie together by using a rope, and then the sticks are raised by pulling the enf of the rope to form a frame, which is called a tripod. Then, following this, more sticks are added to the tripod, and the end of the rope is wrapped around all the structure to keep it together.

After doing those, a canvas is covered around another stick, which is separated. Next, it is lifted against the frame and the convas unwrapped onto the whole structure. The ends of the canvas then are pinned together using metal pins. Finally, the bottom of the canvas are fixed to the ground. The tepee is ready to use.