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The prevention of health problems and health illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree.

In recent days, the question of whether it is possible for government to invest on taking precautions against diseases or curing the same has been receiving a great deal of public attention. In my point of view, I strongly agree that administrative funds should be used to avoid health issues and ailments in the terms of saving money and healthy lifestyle in state of preservation.
First at all, government should invest an appropriate budget on preventive measures rather than fund as a whole for hospital, which brings about greater financial benefit for society. As for some certain diseases, getting treatment for those is not a cup of tea, especially of lower and middle –class families. For example, in 2020, widespread plagues of COVID 19 drove economy in hundreds of families to impoverishment due to the rare and expensive medical machines for treatments. However, the rate of people who are infected by COVID 19 has been decreased after many authorities of different countries has launched a campaign highlighting the health consequences of corona virus at all major media. This has helped people save money which otherwise could have gone into treating illnesses related to death disease.

Secondly, the administrative funds for public campaign of prevention diseases can courage people to maintain a healthy lifestyle in a long-term period. As for some fatal illness such as cancer or AIDS, it is feasible to keep these diseases under control by a high public awareness about eating habits and daily activities, which could be promoted by a qualified investment of government in health education programs. As a result, incidence of death diseases reduce dramatically

In conclusion, it is possible to invest on prevention of health illness because this way act as an economical and security shield against diseases for millions people health around the world. Thus, I completely agree with precaution better than cure.