Please review my essay for the IELTS writing task1 (AYK)

The two illustrations describe how the town in Toddingham has changed over 25 years - from 1975 to 2000. Overall, it can be seen that the town has developed more to be residents-friendly by building facilities such as a sports center, a shopping mall, and a park.

Firstly, transportation became much more convenient; a vertical road crossing the existing one was created slightly on the right side of the map. This road which demolished manufacturing sites passes the wood in the north so it is more accessible to visit there. Also, drivers can park their car in the parking area alongside the road and visit the park in the east.

At the crossroads, another bus stop was placed and there was an additional school on the opposite side of the bus stop by 2000.

The large farm in the north-west side of the old map turned into two large facilities: the sports center and the shopping mall. The residential area in the south-west has expanded to the east, crossing the new road so that more people can live around this town.

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