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Topic: The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing household in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

My essay:

The first figure plots the changes in percentages of households with electrical appliances, and the second figure plots the number of hours spent doing housework per household per week between 1920 and 2019.

Overall, there was an upward trend in the ownership of electrical appliances, which coincides with the diminishing amount of housework time during this period.

In detail, there were approximately only 40%, 30%, and 0% of households used washing machines, vacuum cleaners, and refrigerators, respectively, while around 50 hours were being spent per week on housework in 1920. By 1940, more than half of the households were using these three categories of electrical appliances as a drop of 30% occurred in the time spent on housework, cutting it down to around 35 hours per week. By 2000, almost every household used vacuum cleaners and refrigerators, while they only spent approximately 15 hours on their housework, which dropped to as low as 10 hours in 2019. There was a slight drop in the use of washing machines in 1980, going down from 70% in 1960 to 65%, but it rebounded back in 2000 and hovered around 75% in 2019.