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Essay topics:The graph below shows Long-Term International Migration in UK, 1999-2008.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.My essay:The line graph compares the number of people who come in and out of the UK from 1999 to 2008. The bar chart plots the annual net migration over the same period. Overall, both curves, immigration and emigration, increased over time. The net migration was into the country each year, with an average of about 180 thousand. In detail, in 1999, about 450,000 people immigrated to the UK, and 300,000 emigrated, the net migration being 160,000; it remained around that level during the first five years and decreased slightly to 150,000 in 2003. That was due to immigration being highly positively correlated with emigration, but with a smaller rise, 50 versus 80 thousand. After that, the number emigrating dropped marginally to 350,000 in 2004, with a peak of 400,000 in 2006 and its endpoint of 420,000. In contrast, that of immigrating peaked at nearly 600,000, and then varied by only 2%, ending with exactly the same as in 2004. As a result, the net migration reached its highest points of 250 and 240 thousand in 2004 and 2007, respectively. By 2008, it declined back to when it was in 1999, 170,000.  Could you post a sample essay, please? I’m really, really grateful.

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The line graph compares the number of people who come in and out (That is incorrect. Travelers on business or vacation or to visit family come in and out. They are not immigrants or emigrants. These people leave permanently to settle in a different country.) of the UK from 1999 to 2008. ~~The bar chart plots the annual net migration over the same period.~~

There is no separate bar chart. The bars are on the same graph together with the lines and they give you no additional information. If you subtract the value on the emigration curve from the immigration curve, you get the value of the bar.

Overall, both curves, immigration and emigration, increased over time. The net migration was into the country each year, with an average of about 180 thousand.

In detail, in 1999, about 450,000 people immigrated to the UK, and 300,000 emigrated, the net migration being 160,000; it remained around that level ~~during the first~~ for five years and decreased slightly to 150,000 in 2003. ~~That was due to~~ Immigration was ~~being~~ highly positively correlated with emigration, but had ~~with~~ a smaller rise, 50 versus 80 thousand. ~~After that~~, In 2004, the number emigrating dropped ~~marginally~~ to 350,000 ~~in 2004~~, and then went up to ~~with a peak of~~ (There is no peak in 2006 since the value in 2008 was even higher.) 400,000 in 2006 ~~and its endpoint of~~ ending at 420,000. In contrast, ~~that of~~ immigration peaked at nearly 600,000 in 2006, and then varied by only 2%, ending with exactly the same value as in 2004. As a result, the net migration reached its highest points of 250 and 240 thousand in 2004 and 2007, respectively. By 2008, it declined back to where ~~when~~ it was in 1999, 170,000.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

The graph plots the numbers of UK emigrants and immigrants each year between 1999 and 2008. Bars on this graph show the annual difference between the two.

Overall, there was a net immigration every year and both curves showed rising levels of migration in both directions. Because the curves were positively correlated, the net, or difference between them, did not have any distinct trend.

In detail, the total migration in 1999 was about three-quarters of a million people, 300,000 entering the UK, and 450,000 leaving. In 2008, the total was slightly over a million, with just under 600,000 entering and 420,000 leaving. Although the curves tracked each other fairly well, 2004 was an exception when immigration was near its highest value of 600,000 but emigration had a temporary decrease (330,000). The net that year was 250,000, the highest level over the period. The second largest value, 230,000, came in 2007 where there was a noticeable dip in the number of emigrants. However, in 2008, net migration returned to near the ten-year average of about 180,000.

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