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Some people think that young people should follow social traditions. Others think that they should be free to have their own way of living and behaving. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Presumably, social traditions are what mold and set a standard for a person’s thinking and behaviors. Some people think that the young should appreciate and adhere to these values, whereas others say that the young should have the right to live as they wish. I agree with the former but have some reservations.

On the one hand, some people feel that the youth should be allowed to live freely. The reason for this belief might be that they may be seriously under the influence of celebrities. It seems that famous people are always trying to stand out from others; their behaviors and attitudes might be outrageous and bizarre in order to capture the attention of the public. Because of this, some people might be brainwashed into thinking that it is best to display a person’s individuality rather than suppress it to align with social norms and traditions. Nonetheless, this way of thinking is seriously mistaken since celebrities seem to have a propensity to create drama and attract attention from the press. And their behaviors can sometimes exert negative impacts on society.

On the other hand, social traditions were established based on cultural practice. Therefore, by following those, the young can preserve their cultural identity. As an example, incense offering is an indispensable feature in Vietnamese ceremonies as it is a vehicle for the Vietnamese to express appreciation and commemorate their forebears. So if the young were to stop practicing this custom, then they would demean the importance of those rituals, thereby leading to a degradation of their culture. However, there are some traditions that need to be eliminated. For example, arranged and early marriage should be abolished since it violates people’s freedom. This means although it is important for the young to stick to social traditions, they should also consider disregarding those which are outdated and nonsensical.

In conclusion, I believe that although it would be beneficial for society, if the young keep practicing social traditions, some of those customs should be delegated to the past. This is because they impinge upon people's freedom.